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书面表达(满分25分) 孩子成长和教育是社会热议的话题,现今父母包揽一切、孩子过度依赖等现象十分严重。请阅读下面的漫画,按要求用英文写一篇短文。

英语试题 08-10

书面表达(满分25分)
孩子成长和教育是社会热议的话题,现今父母包揽一切、孩子过度依赖等现象十分严重。请阅读下面的漫画,按要求用英文写一篇短文。
 
内容要求: 1.描述漫画内容;
2. 分析漫画所揭示的问题; 3. 提出你的看法。
注意:
1.短文开头已给出,不计入总词数;
2.考生可适当发挥,使文章内容充实、连贯;
3.词数120左右;
4. 文中不能出现考生的具体信息。
参考词汇:pave the way
From the picture, we can see a family of three walking on a long red carpet.
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【答案】From the picture we can see a family of three walking on a long red carpet. The son, well dressed, waves proudly in the middle while the father behind bends forward to hold the jacket and the mother in front rolls out the carpet, sweating.
It shows a common phenomenon nowadays that children are the focus of families, shouldering the hope of their parents. Parents arrange everything for their children and spare no effort to pave the way for their success. As a consequence, children become so reliant on their parents that they have no independent thought or creative ideas.
Such a situation is of great concern. In my opinion, overprotection and too much care are extremely bad for children's
development. Instead of doing everything for them, parents should encourage their children to overcome difficulties and inspire them to develop by themselves. Only in this way can they grow up to be independent and become truly successful.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇图画作文
【详解】这篇书面表达以漫画的形式讲述"以孩子为中心的三口之家,孩子是小皇帝,父母是臣仆"这一社会现象,发人深省。漫画式作文就是通过漫画提供的图像信息写一篇短文,漫画作文就内容而言,可以写观察到的内容,也可以根据合理想象适当进行发挥来补充一些内容;就表达方式而言,可以单纯地理解、说明,也可以在说明中加以描写、叙述。写好漫画作文的要求是:认真审图,确立主题,提炼要点,展开联想或发表感想,变点为句,连句成篇。要达到这些要求,我们就必须认真审图,善于利用图中人物间的关系、人物的对话、人物的活动及所处场所,以及图(表)中的文字说明和标识来提炼要点;要围绕主题展开合理的想象,切忌游离于主题展开不着边际的联想或感想。写作时注意准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系,尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式,同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。
【点睛】文章思路清晰,语言规范,段落整齐,语篇连贯,层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式:The son, well dressed, waves proudly in the middle while the father behind bends forward to hold the jacket and the mother in front rolls out the carpet, sweating.这句话里面是while引导的并列句。还有It shows a common phenomenon nowadays that children are the focus of families, shouldering the hope of their parents.这句话里面用了非谓语动词,还有最后一句话Only in this way can they grow up to be independent and become truly successful.这句话用了倒装句。高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次,整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。

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