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书面表达 【情况一】假定你是李华,这次期末英语考试考得好。请给你的英语老师Mr. Wang写封信。信的内容包括(考得好):

英语作文范文 02-21
书面表达
【情况一】假定你是李华,这次期末英语考试考得好。请给你的英语老师Mr. Wang写封信。信的内容包括(考得好):
1.答题感受;2.表示感谢;3.邀请放假一起出去看电影。
【情况二】假定你是李华,这次期末英语考试考得不好。请给你的英语老师Mr. Wang写封信。信的内容包括(考得不好):
1.答题感受;2.表示遗憾;3.请老师分析试卷并咨询寒假英语自学方法。
注意:1.字数100字左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
Dear Mr. Wang,_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
范文】【情况一】
Dear Mr. Wang
I am writing to tell you a piece of good news that I have passed my final English exam successfully.
I felt nervous when I got the text paper, and the reason is that I was afraid I would fail the exam which was extremely important for me. However, I thought of what you had taught me: concentrate on and do your best. So, I took a deep breath and began to answer the questions on the paper. Unexpectedly, I could do most of them and finally I got a good grade. Therefore, I want to express my heartfelt thanks for you. Without your help, I wouldn’t get such a good result. So I would like to invite you to go to the cinema.
I would appreciate it if you can come. Looking forward to your early reply.
                                                              Yours sincerely,
                                                                    Li Hua
【情况二】
Dear Mr. Wang,
Knowing that I failed the final English exam, I felt upset. Here is my reflection about this exam.
I felt confident when I got the text paper, because I had prepared for the exam for a long time. I was certain that I would pass the exam. However, my mind went blank when I saw the grade on the paper. What surprised me was that I should have failed the exam. Therefore, I reflected the paper and finally found that I had made many stupid mistakes. Anyway, I hope that you can help my analyze the paper and and tell me what I should do if I want to improve my English.
I would appreciate it if you could write to me soon.
                                                              Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇应用文。给外教写一封信。信的内容包括两个方面:期末英语考试考得好和考的不好。任选其一,表达自己对这次考试的感受。
【详解】第一步:审题
体裁:应用文
时态:根据提示,时态应以一般过去时和一般现在时为主。
要求:1.表达答题感受
      2.表示感谢/遗憾
      3. 邀请放假一起出去看电影/请老师分析试卷并咨询寒假英语自学方法
第二步:列提纲 (重点词组)
a piece of good news; the reason is that; fail the exam; however; concentrate on; do your best; take a deep breath; therefore; prepare for the exam; pass the exam; I would appreciate it if……;looking forward to your early reply.
第三步:连词成句
1. I am writing to tell you a piece of good news that I have passed my final English exam successfully.
2. I felt nervous when I got the text paper, and the reason is that I was afraid I would fail the exam which was extremely important for me.
3. However, I thought of what you had taught me:concentrate on and do your best.
4. What surprised me was that I should have failed the exam.
5. Without your help, I wouldn’t get such a good result.
6. Knowing that I failed the final English exam, I felt upset.
7. I felt confident when I got the text paper, because I had prepared for the exam for a long time.
8. However, my mind went blank when I saw the grade on the paper.
9. What surprised me was that I should have failed the exam.
10. I would appreciate it if you could write to me soon.
根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步:连句成篇(衔接词)
1.表文章结构顺序:First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last
2.表并列补充关系:What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,
3.表转折对比关系:However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that… 
4.表因果关系:Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
第五步:润色修改
连句成文,注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡,书写一定要规范清晰。
【点睛】范文内容完整,要点全面,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多定语从句,如:the reason is that I was afraid I would fail the exam which was extremely important for me.这句话运用了which引导的定语从句;以及主语从句,如:What surprised me was that I should have failed the exam.同时,使用了一些固定词组,如concentrate on; do your best; take a deep breath; look forward to等。全文中没有中国式英语的句式,显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外,文章思路清晰、层次分明,上下句转换自然,为文章增色添彩。
 
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