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书面表达 假设你校英语学习报正在举办题为“My favorite sport”的征文活动,请你根据以下提示写一篇不少于100词的短文。内容要点如下:

英语作文范文 03-02
书面表达
假设你校英语学习报正在举办题为“My favorite sport”的征文活动,请你根据以下提示写一篇不少于100词的短文。内容要点如下:
What’s your favorite sport?
Why do you like this sport?
What benefits can you get from this sport?
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范文】One possible version (1)
My favorite sport
My favorite sport is football, which is a worldwide game. Everyone knows it and lots of people like it.
The reasons why I like it are as follows. First of all, it can fit my body. When I was young, I usually got sick, but after I played it, I became stronger than before. Secondly, I am fond of the feeling of high speed. While playing football, I have to rob the ball and run faster. Sometimes I can hear the sound of wind, I enjoy running in the wind. I feel so great. Last and the most important, playing football is my dream. I want to be a football player in the future.
In a word, playing football not only builds up my strength but also develops my personality. I believe one day my dream will come true.
One possible version (2)
My favorite sport
I like sports very much. But of all the sports I like playing basketball most, because I think playing basketball is very cool and interesting.
To begin with, playing basketball is a good way to make friends. We have common interests, so in my spare time, I often play basketball with my friends on the playground near my home. We have a good time when playing basketball together. Besides, the real reason why I like basketball is that I like NBA stars and the best basketball player in the history of the game I like is Michael Jordan. Last but not least, playing basketball is not only good for our health but also makes people excited.
Personally, it is easy to play basketball. I hope everyone love basketball, too. So we can play together, We can have a good time when playing football.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文,要求考生写一篇短文,在短文中:喜欢的运动项目;为什么喜欢这个运动项目;该运动项目给你生活和学习带来的益处。
【详解】第一步:审题
体裁:说明文。
格式:一般短文格式。
要点:要包括三个要点——喜欢的运动项目;为什么喜欢这个运动项目;该运动项目给你生活和学习带来的益处。
结构:总分总法
第二步:列提纲(重点短语和词汇)
1. favorite; worldwide ; as follows; fit; be fond of; rob the ball; in the wind; build up; strength; develops; personality
2. cool and interesting; common interests; in my spare time; history; health; excited
第三步:连词成句
1. My favorite sport is football. It is a worldwide game.
The reasons why I like it are as follows.
Playing football not only builds up my strength but also develops my personality.
2. I like playing basketball most of all the sports, because I think playing basketball is very cool and interesting.
Why I like basketball is as plain as the nose on one's face .
Playing basketball is good for our health. It make people excited.
I hope everyone love basketball, too.
第四步:连句成篇
第五步:润色修改
【点睛】范文格式正确,完成了试题规定的任务,覆盖所有内容要点,应用了很多的语法结构和词汇:范文1中,状语从句When I was young, I usually got sick, but after I played it, I became stronger than before.非谓语动词While playing football, I have to rob the ball, and I need to run faster.非限制性定语从句My favorite sport is football, which is a worldwide game.同位语从句The reasons why I like it are as follows.宾语从句I believe one day my dream will come true.
范文2中,状语从句和非谓语动词But of all the sports I like playing basketball most, because I think playing basketball is very cool and interesting.同位语从句、表语从句和定语从句…the real reason why I like basketball is that I like N B a stars and the best basketball player in the history of the game I like is Michael Jordan.
两篇范文中比较有特点的是句与句之间,段与段之间的衔接词应用的很好,如范文1中的First of all, Secondly, Last and the most important, In a word等。范文2中的To begin with, Besides, Last but not least, So等,使整篇文章意思表达流畅,层次分明,条分缕析。还有范文1中的很多的非谓语动词作状语While playing football…,非谓语动词作主语playing football not only builds up my strength but also develops my personality使整篇文章的句法结构富于变化。范文2中形式主语I think it is easy to play basketball.连词加非谓语动词We can have a good time when playing football.也具有同样的效果。完全达到了预期的写作目的。
 
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