书面表达（满分 25 分）
你已经结束了高一的生活，为你的学弟学妹高一生活更顺利，请给他们留言，提出一些建议。
根据下面提示，用英语写一篇短文。字数在100字左右。
1合理安排学习，锻炼和休息时间。
2搞好老师和同学的关系。
3积极参加校园活动。
Here are some suggestions for you ,which may help you enjoy your school life better.
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【范文】Here are some suggestions for you ,which may help you enjoy your school life better．
As senior high school students，you will be living a very busy life. So first of all，you should arrange your time properly．You’d better make a timetable so that you know when to study, exercise and rest. Only in this way can you make good use of every minute．Besides ,while in school，it is wise to develop a pleasant relationship with teachers and classmates．When you have a problem that you can’t work it out alone，you’d better turn to your teachers or classmates for help. Of course you should lend a helping hand when necessary．Last but not least, I advise you to take an active part in activities at school ,which will give you good chances to make friends and challenge yourselves．
I hope the suggestions above will help you go through a rich and colorful school life．I’m sure that a beautiful future is waiting for you．
Li Hua
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生写留言给高一学弟学妹，并在学习和生活方面提出一些建议。
【详解】第一步：审题
体裁：应用文
时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时和一般将来时。
结构：总分法
总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。
要求：1.表达留言目的（some suggestions）
2. 建议内容
1）合理安排学习，锻炼和休息时间（arrange your time properly）
2）搞好老师和同学的关系（develop a pleasant relationships with teachers and classmates）
3）积极参加校园活动（take an active part in activities）
3.寒暄结束（hope; beautiful future）
第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）
had better do; make good use of; work out; turn to; take an active part in; give sb. chance to do; go through
第三步：连词成句
1. You’d better make a timetable so that you know when to study, exercise and rest．
2. Only in this way can you make good use of every minute．
3. When you have a problem that you can’t work it out alone，you’d better turn to your teachers or classmates for help.
4. Last but not least, I advise you to take an active part in activities at school ,which will give you good chances to make friends and challenge yourselves．
5. I hope the suggestions above will help you go through a rich and colorful school life．
根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）
1.表文章结构顺序：first of all; firstly/first; secondly/second…; and then; finally; last but not least
2.表并列补充关系：what is more; besides; moreover; furthermore; in addition
连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，
第五步：润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。
1.作者在范文中使用了较多主从复合句，如：
1)You’d better make a timetable so that you know when to study, exercise and rest．(你最好制定一个时间表，这样你就知道什么时候学习，什么时候锻炼，什么时候休息。)
这句话运用了so that引导的目的状语从句。
2)Last but not least, I advise you to take an active part in activities at school ,which will give you good chances to make friends and challenge yourselves．(最后但并非最不重要的，我建议你积极参加学校的活动，这将给你很好的机会交朋友和挑战自己。)
这句话包含which引导的非限制性定语从句。
2.同时运用的倒装句式：Only in this way can you make good use of every minute．(只有这样，你才能充分利用每一分钟)
3.使用了一些固定词组，如had better do; make good use of; work out; turn to; take an active part in; give sb. chance to do; go through等。
全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
你已经结束了高一的生活，为你的学弟学妹高一生活更顺利，请给他们留言，提出一些建议。
根据下面提示，用英语写一篇短文。字数在100字左右。
1合理安排学习，锻炼和休息时间。
2搞好老师和同学的关系。
3积极参加校园活动。
Here are some suggestions for you ,which may help you enjoy your school life better.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【范文】Here are some suggestions for you ,which may help you enjoy your school life better．
As senior high school students，you will be living a very busy life. So first of all，you should arrange your time properly．You’d better make a timetable so that you know when to study, exercise and rest. Only in this way can you make good use of every minute．Besides ,while in school，it is wise to develop a pleasant relationship with teachers and classmates．When you have a problem that you can’t work it out alone，you’d better turn to your teachers or classmates for help. Of course you should lend a helping hand when necessary．Last but not least, I advise you to take an active part in activities at school ,which will give you good chances to make friends and challenge yourselves．
I hope the suggestions above will help you go through a rich and colorful school life．I’m sure that a beautiful future is waiting for you．
Li Hua
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生写留言给高一学弟学妹，并在学习和生活方面提出一些建议。
【详解】第一步：审题
体裁：应用文
时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时和一般将来时。
结构：总分法
总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。
要求：1.表达留言目的（some suggestions）
2. 建议内容
1）合理安排学习，锻炼和休息时间（arrange your time properly）
2）搞好老师和同学的关系（develop a pleasant relationships with teachers and classmates）
3）积极参加校园活动（take an active part in activities）
3.寒暄结束（hope; beautiful future）
第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）
had better do; make good use of; work out; turn to; take an active part in; give sb. chance to do; go through
第三步：连词成句
1. You’d better make a timetable so that you know when to study, exercise and rest．
2. Only in this way can you make good use of every minute．
3. When you have a problem that you can’t work it out alone，you’d better turn to your teachers or classmates for help.
4. Last but not least, I advise you to take an active part in activities at school ,which will give you good chances to make friends and challenge yourselves．
5. I hope the suggestions above will help you go through a rich and colorful school life．
根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）
1.表文章结构顺序：first of all; firstly/first; secondly/second…; and then; finally; last but not least
2.表并列补充关系：what is more; besides; moreover; furthermore; in addition
连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，
第五步：润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。
1.作者在范文中使用了较多主从复合句，如：
1)You’d better make a timetable so that you know when to study, exercise and rest．(你最好制定一个时间表，这样你就知道什么时候学习，什么时候锻炼，什么时候休息。)
这句话运用了so that引导的目的状语从句。
2)Last but not least, I advise you to take an active part in activities at school ,which will give you good chances to make friends and challenge yourselves．(最后但并非最不重要的，我建议你积极参加学校的活动，这将给你很好的机会交朋友和挑战自己。)
这句话包含which引导的非限制性定语从句。
2.同时运用的倒装句式：Only in this way can you make good use of every minute．(只有这样，你才能充分利用每一分钟)
3.使用了一些固定词组，如had better do; make good use of; work out; turn to; take an active part in; give sb. chance to do; go through等。
全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
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