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An old wooden seat that Susan extremely valued often reminded her of mother’s Golden Rule.

英语作文范文 06-05

As Susan hurried home, this conflict went on in her mind. When she passed through the gate, her eyes fell upon the wooden seat. Instantly, the words of the Golden Rule rang in her ears. Turning around quickly, she raced along the road breathlessly until she found herself again at farmer Jason’s gate. “Why are you back again?” shouted the cold fellow angrily, as he saw Susan again at his side. “Sir, you gave me two bills, instead of one,” she said in a trembling voice. “Two bills? Did I? Let me see. Well, so I did. Why didn’t you bring it back sooner? You want to keep it yourself?” he blamed.
Susan’s face became red with embarrassment and annoyance. Tears rolling down her cheeks, she loudly argued that she returned it almost the moment she discovered the truth. Jason looked at the child, seemingly touched. Putting his hand in his pocket, he drew out a few coins and handed them to her. “No, sir. I thank you,” sobbed Susan, “I do not want to be paid for doing right. I only wish you would not think me dishonest.” After hearing this, Jason said sorry to her, ashamed. Susan returned home with a lightened heart. Never would she forget her mother’s Golden rule in her life.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。
【详解】通过阅读所给文章可知,文章讲述了Susan在帮妈妈向Jason索要洗衣费的时候,收到了两张纸币,其中一张是Jason不小心多拿出的,在是否将这张多余的纸币据为己有的矛盾中,Susan最终选择了将其还给Jason。
续写部分分为两段,第一段开头是:As Susan hurried home, this conflict went on in her mind. (当Susan匆忙赶回家时,这个矛盾在她的脑海里继续着。)所以应该写Susan回到家看到那把木制椅子时的感触,想到妈妈的教导,而把多余的钱还给Jason,同时应描写Jason和Susan之间关于还钱的对话,包括Jason的疑惑,质问等;第二段开头是Susan’s face became red with embarrassment and annoyance. ( Susan又尴尬又恼怒,脸都红了。) 本段应该写Susan对于Jason质问的回答,同时Jason对于Susan回答的反应,比如给与奖励,同时呼应文章主题“己所不欲勿施于人”,应描写Susan对此做出的回应,比如拒绝奖励,诚实地表达出个人的想法等。要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右,按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】本文描写详略得当,使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如:1.高级词汇:fall upon on; roll down; draw out; hand sth. to sb.2.复合句式:“Why are you back again?” shouted the cold fellow angrily, as he saw Susan again at his side. (as引导时间状语从句)Tears rolling down her cheeks, she loudly argued that she returned it almost the moment she discovered the truth .(“tears rolling down her cheeks”为独立主格结构,表伴随;the moment 引导时间状语从句。)Putting his hand in his pocket, he drew out a few coins and handed them to her. (putting his hand in his pocket为现在分词作状语)Never would she forget her mother’s Golden rule in her life.(否定词置于句首,部分倒装)
 
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