书面表达（满分10分）
6月6日是全国爱眼日。在爱眼日来临之际，你校英文报以“爱护眼睛”为主题开展征文活动，请根据以下提示写一篇短文投稿。要点提示：
1.用眼的不良习惯和问题；
2.保护眼睛的措施和建议。
注意:1.词数100左右；
2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 参考词汇：myopia n. 近视
How to Protect Our Eyes
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【范文】How to Protect Our Eyes
Eye is the window of our mind. We use our eyes to see everything around us. Without eyes, nothing is left beside you but darkness.
But nowadays, the number of myopia among students increases sharply. We can see more and more students around us wear glasses and the glasses on the nose are getting thicker and thicker. It not only has a strong impact on our study, but also makes our daily life inconvenient.
How to protect our eyes? It’s not right to keep your eyes working for a long time. You’d better not read in a strong or poor light. Don’t read in bed or on a moving bus. Remember to keep your books away from your eyes for about a foot and do eye-exercises every day. What’s more, a balanced diet is necessary.
Follow my advice and form a good habit. It’s time to say goodbye to thick glasses.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于说明文。要求考生指出用眼的不良习惯和问题并提出保护眼睛的措施和建议。
【详解】第一步：审题
体裁：说明文
时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时。
结构：总分法
总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。
要求：1.指出用眼的不良习惯和问题；
2.提出保护眼睛的措施和建议。
第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）
the window of our mind; the number of myopia among students; wear glasses; be getting thicker and thicker; have a strong impact on our study; make our daily life inconvenient; keep your eyes working for a long time; keep your books away from your eyes; a balanced diet
第三步：连词成句
1. Eye is the window of our mind.
2. The number of myopia among students increases sharply.
3. We can see more and more students around us wear glasses and the glasses on the nose are getting thicker and thicker.
4. It not only has a strong impact on our study, but also makes our daily life inconvenient.
5. It’s not right to keep your eyes working for a long time.
6. Remember to keep your books away from your eyes.
7. A balanced diet is necessary.
根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）
1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last
2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,
3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…
4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。
第五步：润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多祈使句来表达建议，如：Don’t read in bed or on a moving bus；Remember to keep your books away from your eyes for about a foot and do eye-exercises every day.全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
6月6日是全国爱眼日。在爱眼日来临之际，你校英文报以“爱护眼睛”为主题开展征文活动，请根据以下提示写一篇短文投稿。要点提示：
1.用眼的不良习惯和问题；
2.保护眼睛的措施和建议。
注意:1.词数100左右；
2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 参考词汇：myopia n. 近视
How to Protect Our Eyes
__________________________________________________________
【范文】How to Protect Our Eyes
Eye is the window of our mind. We use our eyes to see everything around us. Without eyes, nothing is left beside you but darkness.
But nowadays, the number of myopia among students increases sharply. We can see more and more students around us wear glasses and the glasses on the nose are getting thicker and thicker. It not only has a strong impact on our study, but also makes our daily life inconvenient.
How to protect our eyes? It’s not right to keep your eyes working for a long time. You’d better not read in a strong or poor light. Don’t read in bed or on a moving bus. Remember to keep your books away from your eyes for about a foot and do eye-exercises every day. What’s more, a balanced diet is necessary.
Follow my advice and form a good habit. It’s time to say goodbye to thick glasses.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于说明文。要求考生指出用眼的不良习惯和问题并提出保护眼睛的措施和建议。
【详解】第一步：审题
体裁：说明文
时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时。
结构：总分法
总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。
要求：1.指出用眼的不良习惯和问题；
2.提出保护眼睛的措施和建议。
第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）
the window of our mind; the number of myopia among students; wear glasses; be getting thicker and thicker; have a strong impact on our study; make our daily life inconvenient; keep your eyes working for a long time; keep your books away from your eyes; a balanced diet
第三步：连词成句
1. Eye is the window of our mind.
2. The number of myopia among students increases sharply.
3. We can see more and more students around us wear glasses and the glasses on the nose are getting thicker and thicker.
4. It not only has a strong impact on our study, but also makes our daily life inconvenient.
5. It’s not right to keep your eyes working for a long time.
6. Remember to keep your books away from your eyes.
7. A balanced diet is necessary.
根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）
1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last
2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,
3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…
4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。
第五步：润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多祈使句来表达建议，如：Don’t read in bed or on a moving bus；Remember to keep your books away from your eyes for about a foot and do eye-exercises every day.全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
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